Thursday, May 31, 2007

My Hook for Your Comments (Please)

On May 22, Nathan Bransford wrote an insightful blog about what makes a good hook.

He says: "So essentially, a hook is the quest and the central conflict, described as succinctly as possible, designed to make someone want to read more."

Here are some examples he provided:

  • A man goes into the jungle to search for a missing general (HEART OF DARKNESS
  • A reclusive chocolateer opens up his factory to the lucky children who find golden tickets (CHARLIE AND THE CHOCOLATE FACTORY)
  • A monomaniacal sea captain forces his crew to search for an elusive white whale (MOBY DICK)
  • A train engine thinks it can make it up a hill (THE LITTLE ENGINE THAT COULD)

Reading his post this morning created my own little brainwave -- the idea for a hook for my MS. Please have a look then critique the heck out of it.

"Seven characters at various stages of rage, self-destruction, denial or legal intervention meet at a weekly support group."

Does it meet Nathan's definition of a good hook?

Bring it on. (Or, as they say in these parts, "Give 'er.")

Colleen

Wednesday, May 30, 2007

Just for you: a fun exercise in editing

Doing a bit of research on designer handbags and shoes (I know, tough job) I came across this ad at Footcandy Shoes:

"Slouchy and soft in croc-embossed leather. This bag is completly lined in nylon with zip clousure pocket and accessable cell phone pocket. 6.5in handle drop with decrative tassel detail. 12"H X 15"L X 5"W"

And this brilliant bio...

(I'm sure there are more gems to be found at Footcandy, but, sadly, I couldn't spend all day there.)

Manolo Blahnik

Manolo Blahnik began his extraordinary career in the Seventies and continues to be a champion of timeless and beautifully crafted designs. His shoes are synonymous with high glamour and full-throttle sex appeal and have become as famous as the women who wear them. Born in 1943 in the Canary Islands to a Spanish mother and Czech father and raised on a banana plantation, Blahnik's formative years could not have been further from the fashion capitals of the world. He began by studying architecture and literature at the University of Geneva but abandoned his studies after just a year in favor of moving to Paris 1968. He moved to London two years later where he worked briefly as a photographer for the Sunday Times and immediately fell into the fashion set, making friends with Paloma Picasso and photographer Eric Boman. During a trip to New York in 1971 with his new friends, Blahnik was introduced to Diana Vreeland, then the editor-in-chief of US Vogue, by Picasso. At the time, Blahnik wanted to be a theatre designer but, once he had been persuaded to show her his sketches and after admiring the shoes he had on - a tiny Edwardian pair from Portobello Market - Vreeland insisted that he "should concentrate on the funny little things on the feet". And Blahnik obeyed. His first collection was designed for Ossie Clark in 1972. In 1973, he opened Zapata, a boutique on Old Church Street in London which soon became regularly frequented by Bianca Jagger, Marie Helvin and Jerry Hall. Now universally known as 'Manolo's', Blahnik's shoes are coveted by a long list of famous clientele from celebrities to royalty. Bianca wore them to make her famous Studio 54 entrance on a white horse in 1977, and Diana, Princess of Wales wore them to the Serpentine Gallery in 1994 on the night that Prince Charles admitted his infidelity on television. Madonna once described shoes designed by Blahnik as "better than sex" and added that, "what's more, they last longer". Later, his name became even better known when his designs took 'supporting roles' on the hit television shows Absolutely Fabulous and Sex And The City. A craftsman with an impeccable eye for detail, Blahnik plays the major part in the creation of his designs, from the initial sketches to creating his own advertising campaigns which always feature his drawings. In 2003, he was honored with a retrospective exhibition of his drawings, memorabilia and collections at the Design Museum in London.

This is ridiculous

Noticing that it was after 10 a.m. and I hadn't done anything productive with my writing (which has been the case for days now) I figured I'd better get my rear in gear and, at the very least, enter some of the hard copy edits I've made.

Holy Hannah. Holy friggin' Hannah. (Although what's really going through my head is substantially more profane.)

I have notes on various copies/versions of the ms, handwritten sections to be added, and electronic edits provided by my friend Becca.

I am officially daunted.

I've now had too much coffee and my stomach is jittery and my hands are twitching and I'm looking at the mess before me with hypertrophied eyes praying for some insight on where and how to begin.

And so, I inhale and exhale with great deliberation -- a few times -- hoping the phone will ring or my stomach will stop doing somersaults or the stiffness in my neck will miraculously loosen.

What I wouldn't give for a secretary right now.

But the phone isn't ringing and my stomach is still doing the jive and my neck is pulling the muscles from between my shoulder blades to those bony knobs at the base of my skull. There's nothing for it, but to begin.

And so, I dive.

Wish me luck.

Colleen

Sunday, May 27, 2007

Tim Horton's coffee

On the way home from a semi-farewell dinner (I'm sure there will be more to come) with friends who are moving back to Ontario (sob) I received the troubling news that Tim Horton's puts nicotine into their coffee to increase our addiction and ensure a long line of customers.

Anyone who has been to Canada knows that Canadians are nuts about their Tim's -- by which they mean coffee. The phrase: "Let's go get a Tim's," means it's coffee break time. Whether donuts are also purchased is irrelevant. While there are many other coffee shops to be found across our fair land, it is Tim's that issues its siren call to the Canadian heart.

The morning drive in to work wouldn't be the same without a cup of Tim's for many. A great many. Canadians would rather line up for Tim's -- and they do, daily -- than zip into Starbucks or Perks. Some Tim's shops are open 24/7.

To be told that nicotine is added to the standard blend of Arabia beans was, well, startling, to say the least.

Of course, I had to get on the Internet first thing this morning to check it out.

Turns out it's an urban myth.

Apparently, an explanation was sought for the ridiculous popularity of Timmy's and when neither divine intervention nor the addictive quality of caffeine was regarded as a sufficient reason, nicotine or, in some versions, MSG was considered to be the culprit.

As it turns out, we're just crazy for Tim's. Or just plain crazy. Even the urban myth did nothing to curb our line-ups. The Canadian military now have Tim's served to them overseas. And, once only available in Canada, today 400 of the insidious shops can be found in the U.S.

(Frankly, I think the coffee at Tim's is terrible. But I'm whispering that statement through the anonymity of the Internet. I wouldn't want to see my house egged.)

And so, my detective work is done and I have to run. Time for my morning fix.

Have a great day!

Colleen

Friday, May 25, 2007

The Father Space: First Posting

Here goes the first posting for The Father Space. I figured I better go first. I hope the rest of you are thinking about submitting. Comments on writing welcome. Cheers! Colleen


My Father's Faith

My father remains an enigma. He died twenty-six years ago at a time before I had the lexicon or courage to ask the questions I would ask today. The things I think I know about him are unformed and contradictory. His staunch support of human rights versus the cruel way he treated my mother, for example. He’s been a tough guy to figure out.

But every family has its legends. Stories told and retold by older ones to younger ones who listen with rapt attention, understanding what they are able, the facts retained to greater or lesser degree based on this understanding. There is such a legend about my father. It is the one thing about him that I am truly proud. This is how I remember it.

My father was a labour organizer in the 40s and 50s in the dirty mining towns of Northern Ontario and Quebec. It must have been a tough go in those primarily-Catholic communities at a time when the Church was anti-union. Priests would preach against the organization of workers from their pulpits and, pettily, not allow the men – for it would have been men back then – use of the chairs belonging to the diocese for their meetings. This was the final straw that drove my father from the Church – its stance on keeping people in poverty and under Church control, not its pigheadedness about chair usage. However, this story isn’t about his change in faith, but about his ideals.

By the late 1950s, and, I imagine, having grown very tired of the Church’s thrall over his constituency, my father left the North and became the director of the textile union in Toronto. The Textile Workers Union of America it was then; I’m not sure if that is still what it’s called. Working in the sweatshops of the textile industry, as you may know, is one of the worst jobs a person can have. It was a time when women were paid at a different – and lower rate – than men. It was a time when few of the labour standards that we take for granted today were in place.

It was a time when, exactly like today, union reps vote for their wage increases. Increases that are borne by the men and women who pay union dues.

In about 1963 – I believe I was four when this happened – the representatives of the textile union voted themselves a raise. It was a raise that my father believed the workers couldn’t afford. As director, he had the power to veto the raise and he did. Another cast of ballots was called and my father was voted out of power.

The guy with the ideals of equality and caring for your fellow man was out of work.

And so, he turned to his friends for help. Powerful friends who he had helped get elected turned their backs, couldn’t remember his name.

In anger, I suspect, my father took the union to court. I’m not clear whether wrongful dismissal was even on the books back then, but whatever the charges were, my father filed them then represented himself against the union lawyers.

My father won.

The judge told him he should have been a lawyer. The French kid from Northern Ontario with the high school diploma.

The union had to reinstate my father. He told them to go fuck themselves and walked away.

He changed his job and began negotiating on the side of management in the steel and then pulp-and-paper industries. He often set records in settling traditionally-difficult contracts. He changed his politics and began working on Liberal campaigns with the same fervour he had once devoted to the New Democratic Party.

My father first left the Church for his socialist beliefs. When these ideals did him in, I wonder at the personal cost he must have paid. I’ll never know.

Maybe this is a story about faith after all.

Writing the Great American Novel

I haven't figured out how to write the Great Canadian Novel, but, apparently this is how the Great American Novel can be written. A good breakfast, champagne and a refreshing apricot scrub.

Sandals and crackers

Well here's a new sort of promotion. With every pair of women's sandals, get a free box of crackers! Woohoo! Did somebody say crackers? With sandals? I'm all over that one.

Pug recall

Apologies to pug lovers everywhere, but this is really funny. Brought to you by Becca (thanks for sharing) and The Onion.

Email bankruptcy

Getting too much email? Check out this article from the Washington Post.

Interview with Margaret Atwood

(I promise this will be my last link to something today. But it's been an eclectic grouping, don't you think?)

When asked whether she always wanted to be a writer, Margaret says that she had planned to be a home economist. In her grade nine guidance handbook c. 1952 , there were five jobs listed for women. They were: secretary, airline stewardess, school teacher, nurse and home economist. Home economist paid the most, so Margaret figured that would be what she would do.

Glad she changed her mind.

You can watch her interview here.

Thursday, May 24, 2007

The Father Space: Pt II

I've begun giving some thought to what I might write about my father. This isn't going to be easy. I could write about what a prick he was, but since he's no longer around to defend himself, that doesn't seem fair. So, I have to find a way to offer some balance. To find a way of uncovering a piece of my father that is true and, perhaps, even compelling.

This is going to be interesting.

Writing ain't for sissies.

Colleen

Wednesday, May 23, 2007

The Father Space

(Thank you, Margaret Atwood for the above.)

Before I head out I wanted to share an idea with you.

A book has just been released called The First Man in my Life. (from Amazon) "In twenty-two original narratives, some of Canada’s most acclaimed writers share stories, memories, insights, and revelations—from the comic to the tragic, and every shading in between—about the first man in their lives. Complex, compelling, unforgettable, these stories will open a fresh and intense conversation with daughters everywhere about the men they’ve observed since childhood: their fathers.

"Contributors: Katherine Ashenburg, Anita Rau Badami, Christie Blatchford, Mary Anne Brinckman, Nancy Dorrance, Jane Finlay-Young, Camilla Gibb, Catherine Gildiner, Rebecca Godfrey, Rachel Manley, Sandra Martin, Lisa Moore, Sarah Murdoch, Marina Nemat, P.K. Page, Emma Richler, Eden Robinson, Rebecca Snow, Tina Srebotnjak, Susan Swan, Emily Urquhart, and Pamela Wallin"

I just listened to an interview with Anita Rau Badami and editor of the book, Sandra Martin and thought wouldn't it be a great idea for us to write and compile our own stories of our fathers? I think it would be even better to have stories of fathers from both men and women.

So, I'm inviting you to submit stories of your fathers. I haven't written mine yet, but will post it as soon as I'm done and hope you will too.

If this goes well, perhaps we can select other topics to write about and share here online.

Colleen

Day off

Well, we finally have some sun so I'm heading to the great outdoors today. I'm not sure how far afield I'll go, but it's time I figure out how to use my digital camera.

Have a great day!
Colleen

Sunday, May 20, 2007

What is Stephen Harper reading?

One more post for today...

Many thanks to Richard at Smart Like Streetcar (link at right) for the heads up on this.

Novelist and Booker Prize winner Yann Martel has expressed his concern that Prime Minister Stephen Harper is less than enthusiastic about the arts. To prompt our leader to pull up a chair and read a book every now and again, Martel is sending him a book every second Monday.

The bi-weekly selections along with the accompanying letters are posted here .

It's a brilliant idea and well worth the read.

From all of us Yann, thanks.

Colleen

Spring mold

I think I may be adapting to the East coast spring.

It's our third and I am less depressed than I have been in previous years when I longed for the heat and sunshine of an Ontario spring. I'm not saying the rain and gloom that has landed here over the past few days has had no effect, but I am less suicidal than our first year here.

That particular May saw rain fall every day for a month and, jokes about Noah aside, there was little to laugh about. I dreamed of the Tulip Festival that I was missing, meeting with friends at outdoor patios, even the lineups at the gardening centres on the long weekend.

Instead I saw mildew creep onto the siding of our house, bed linens felt permanently soggy, and bathroom towel never seemed to dry. The upside was that my skin looked great.

Although the long weekend has arrived and it's too early to plant and I'm still wearing warm socks and a pullover, it's okay. I know that once summer hits (expected date of arrival is July 2, narrowly missing Canada Day) we will have the most glorious weather that will last until November.

There is no time better than a Maritime summer day when the sun is out, the breezes are blowing and black fly season is over. Unless, of course, it's a warm day in October when the fall colours are in full riot and we're driving along the Cabot Trail overlooking the cliffs that drop to the ocean.

I know it's coming; I can wait.

Colleen

Saturday, May 19, 2007

Accomplishment-free Day!

So, where is the woman who boasted she could write anywhere, anytime? Hmmm? Where is she today? I have been procrastinating with such panache (I have no idea what "procrastinating with panache" means, but it sounds stylish and who can beat the alliteration?) and am bored out of my mind, but not really into the whole writing thing today.

Of course, it's been gloomy for days and it's pouring buckets this morning so, maybe I can blame it on the weather. In addition, I have been on mommy-car duty almost every day this week which doesn't turn my crank at all. That gas is now about a hundred dollars a litre doesn't help, but my real issue is that I hate driving into the city. I know, I know, it's not that far nor is it terribly big. As a matter of fact, other cities poke fun at Halifax regularly. So, there is little traffic. Rush hour consists of a 10 to 15 minute delay if Quinpool gets really backed up (Yes, Toronto and Montreal are laughing at this tiny blip on the traffic scale that they wouldn't even consider rush-hour foreplay, but I digress.)

I just want to sit at home and stare at the trees and listen to the birds and be frightfully creative. If driving is to be done it should be in the direction of a beach. Maybe a coffee shop if the weather is miserable. Somewhere to sit and well, you know, be frightfully creative.

So here I am with my frightfully creative self doing everything in my power to make the creation of anything an impossibility.

I've read a few terrific blogs this morning, answered a few emails, and had far too much coffee to drink. Between this, I've managed to get a few pages edited, but now, here I am not editing.

I think I will proclaim today an accomplishment-free day. A day to rent movies and wear flannel pants with elastic waistbands and eat junky snacks and nap.

(Sound of trumpets please.)

Look at that. Even when I'm doing nothing I can convince myself it's something.

Colleen

Friday, May 18, 2007

Query writing tips

I've just read a terrific article by Judy Kellem on how to write a great query here. She has written the article specifically for scriptwriters, but everything holds true for novelists as well.

Here's a snippet...

"...When you sit down to write your query, get crystal clear on what the absolute heart of the story is so that it can work as your compass. You can jot down phrases to help yourself wade through the mire, sifting through all the extraneous arcs, themes etc that are in the material to zero in on the bottom line. For example, what is "STAR WARS" really about? A lot of things - good versus evil, imperialism and despots, fathers and sons, first love, to name a few. But at the very core of this movie, one could argue, is LUKE SKYWALKER'S COMING OF AGE. It is his growth from being a boy to being a man that unites all the other story arcs. This is the FOCUS. Hence, in pitching the script one could begin with this umbrella trajectory:

" Born on the planet of Tatooine, young, inexperienced farmer LUKE SKYWALKER has only dreamt of traveling outside his hemisphere. Until now. For when he discovers two foreign robots on his land, which contain the destructive plans for a 'Death Star' weapon capable of destroying entire worlds within seconds, Luke is catapulted out of his boyhood and into an intergalactic struggle between the forces of good and evil."

I love seeing examples to bring an instruction home. Judy's article uses Star Wars the throughout the article which is really helpful as it is familiar.

Colleen

Writing schedule

Something amusing happened this morning regarding my writing schedule that may give you a smile.

I sat down to finish a new chapter I'm creating for the next draft of the current manuscript. When rifling through a stack of loose pages to uncover what I had already written, I stumbled upon a page with the following:

"You had to hand it to Celeste for her aplomb. Her husband had just found her in bed with her best friend and she didn't even look upset."

Oh, that looks interesting, I thought to myself. Wonder what it is.

I pulled the sheet out of the stack and realized that it's a line from the next MS that I began months ago and had printed off without reading last week.

I had to laugh at myself -- and my poor memory.

Whenever I complete a draft of a MS, I begin the next one then return to the first for editing/review/whatever. If a manuscript takes many drafts to complete, I may begin more than one other story. This is what had happened with the above-mentioned line. I wrote it months ago when I was working on a story that may never see the light of day. (It isn't terribly well written so, unless I develop new enthusiasm for it and complete another rewrite, well, I'm sure I can use it to prop up a table leg somewhere.)

Does anyone else write this way? My vast experience with fiction writing has spanned a whole year and I'm interested in hearing what works for other writers.

Have a great writing day!
Colleen

Thursday, May 17, 2007

Hooks and key messages

Writing a hook has been on my mind since I began this MS. I've wondered/worried/obsessed about how to condense seven protags into two succinct paragraphs. Just as I turned out the light and was drifting off to sleep, violĂ , it came to me. (Must have been Chris' blogging about his hook that had my brain working.)

Of course, I roused myself and wrote it down (the significant other was still in the basement watching a hockey game -- for god's sake, it's almost summer!) and was delighted by my brain wave. The test will come in another month or so, when I am ready to look at it again, but it sure felt good to have thoughts crystallize for a few moments.

I used a connecting character to launch the hook. While this may sound obvious, she is a minor character in the story so focusing on her wasn't instantly top of mind. However, she provided me with a way to discuss the characters in a general way and highlight the plot development and outcome without listing each protagonist. Wouldn't that have been deadly?

The more I read/learn about hooks, the more I am convinced that we (writers) have to distance ourselves from what we have written to be able to delve into what's interesting from someone else's point of view. Yes, our baby may have cute fingers and toes, but these are superfluous to what is in her heart. The details that mean so much to us -- and, hopefully someday to others -- mean little to an agent or editor who has seconds to determine yea or nay.

Hook writing is akin to what I used to harp about when it came to developing key messages with my clients. They would insist that every angle of an issue was a key message and I would ask: "If someone were to learn one and only one thing about your issue what would that be?" I think this is where we need to go with hook development as well. What is the essence of our book? What is the one thing that strikes to the heart of what we have written?

Of course, getting there is another matter. But it helps to know the direction you need to take before you leave home.

Anyway, off to the home school group for most of the day.

Have a great writing day!
Colleen

Wednesday, May 16, 2007

New chapter

What a great editing day it's been today! While waiting in the city for my son to do some volunteer work at the film festival office, I sat at a coffee shop and wrote a partial chapter to replace the one I hated. I am really happy with this addition as, I believe, it helps to complete an element of tension for one of my protagonists that wasn't clearly set out previously.

Gotta get back to it, but thought I'd share.

Colleen

Tuesday, May 15, 2007

May I have an umbrella in that?

So much for waiting a month to begin editing. I managed to go about 48 hours before diving in. (Methinks my addiction is showing.)

The work had gone well. I made amazing strides tightening prose with a finely-tuned wrench, slashing overwriting with new-found skill.

And then came section seven -- the end bit to chapter one. What a *&#$%* dreadful piece of writing it is. I hate it. What was I thinking?

And so, I procrastinate catching up on my blog reading, paying bills, writing this entry because it's too early to drink. And that is what is required. A vat of alcohol to generate creative brain cells, to make me feel brilliant, perhaps to drown myself in.

Of course, the fact that I submitted my application for the grant yesterday has nothing to do with my bout of insecurity today. Nothing at all. The fact that I held on to the damn thing for weeks, repeatedly rewriting sample pages and submitting only when deadline was upon me is no indication of lack of confidence. Not at all.

Hmmmm. Seven minutes to noon.

Colleen

Sunday, May 6, 2007

Best intentions

So, I was having lunch with a friend the other day and we were sharing with each other what was the latest and greatest in our lives when she asked me: "So, how do some authors get their first books published so easily?"

Which implies: "So why can't you?"

"Because I must suck," I wanted to huff, no doubt spurting Perrier through my nostrils.

Instead, I inhaled (such a good thing to do) and recognized that her question, no matter how ill-conceived, was asked in innocence. I attempted an answer that spoke to the inscrutability of the industry as well as the fact that some first books aren't actually first manuscripts.

But, in the end, my blather felt defensive and I left the restaurant feeling like such a loser.

No wonder so many of us develop neuroses and personal tics faster than plots.

Have you found yourself running from supportive (I use the term broadly) questions such as:

"Have you found an agent yet?"

"Is that another rejection letter?"

"Book done yet?"

"Did you hear about XXX's book deal?"

AGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

Enough with the support already. Trust me, if I land a deal or get an agent, my friends and family will be the first to know of it. These are not the questions they need to ask.

Are you with me on this?

Keep smiling!
Colleen

Wednesday, May 2, 2007

Loose ends

Okay, so what do I do now?

The MS is done for a bit as in: I need to let it go for a month and come back to it so I don't obsess, picking away for the sake of picking resulting in nothing constructive. You know what I mean, don't you?

I've already got a start on the next MS. About 20,000 wds in. But I can't seem to feel it today. It:the desire to write. And I'm not sure why. Just like I'm not sure why I wasn't really celebratory after finishing the MS.

I've said before that I can write anytime and that's true. It isn't bragging as I lay no claim to the quality of the writing I complete. It's just that my past professional life has taught me to write to deadline and so I do.

Maybe that's it. I don't have a deadline looming. Just all this time ahead of me. I'm not sure if this is the reason for feeling at loose ends, but it sounds like it could be.

Tick tock. Tick tock.

Yikes.

Well, enough of that. It's research time. (Some call it surfing the Web, I call it research.) Seriously, I think I'll take some time to do some agent research and let my dreams get the better of me for one afternoon.

That's allowed, right?

Here's to great writing!
Colleen

Tuesday, May 1, 2007

Time to celebrate

Well, it's done. This draft of the MS is done.

It now rests in the gentle hands of my good friend and editor who is giving it a read. It is something to be grateful for to have such a friend -- someone who can be counted on to drop everything and start reading whenever I send something her way. Thank you, Becca! If I ever get anything published, it'll be because of you. Seriously.

Today, I'm going to nestle up to a proposal I'm submitting to the provincial government for a creation grant. Deadline is mid-May and I've been sitting on it for the past month so I better get it done. The government administrator was helpful (imagine that) and looked over my draft so I have a better chance of acceptance. I've never applied for one of these babies before, but imagine the competition is pretty tough. I have no idea what the odds are of getting one, but hey, no harm in trying. Wish me luck.

Have a great writing day!
Colleen